I quite enjoyed the imagery you have set up with this piece. Although within the first stanza I seemed to be reading some of the words different than intended such as Tears I was thinking of the one associated to crying. Your word usage within the confines of rhyming were very well thought out. In that there was a melody to the poem rather than a redundancy in sound which often can happen when a poet decides to make things rhyme. The last stanza I felt lacked a little bit of the melody you had created. The first three lines of it seemed to be out of sorts, whereas the rhythm of the piece came back on the last three. However after reading just this poem I would love to read through more of what you've written.